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Originally posted by SemiLiveMusic:
I would ask "Do you LIKE Mr. Page?" Not "Do you have empathy for Mr. Page."


Bill, You're right. Character 'likeablity' is perhaps a better word choice than empathy. For me though, I still don't know enough about him to like or dislike him.

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Originally posted by SemiLiveMusic:
I feel humbled that this cool senior citizen came into my life. . . . He's a cool guy, he's older 'n dirt, he knows a lot of stuff . . . And he made a positive impact on my life


How about leaving your song lyrics just the way they are, but add the above as a revealing discovery for the listener in the very 'last line' of your song.

Scott
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