This is a song I wrote about a soldier in a war. If any comments, thanks. BUT... please do not comment on the recording... this is just a scratch demo. No matter how many times I seem to tell people that on forums, people say "You need to add bass, bring the guitar up, etc., etc. It's JUST a scratch demo.

I mean, if you have suggestions about HOW to make it shine when a real demo is made, that would be great. Or if you have comments or suggestions about the song lyric, melody, progession, yep.

This ain't no lovey-dovey tune, it's about war. Thanks.

CLONK HERE (on WHAT HAVE WE ALL BECOME):

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/billordukethesongwritermusic.htm

Lyric:

“WHAT HAVE WE ALL BECOME”
©2004 All rights reserved

The whole platoon had dug in for the night
A crescent moon does not give off much light
We slept with one eye open till the dawn
So tired but much too scared to risk a yawn
Like gatling guns, the morning filled with lead
It was either shoot like hell or end up dead
We couldn't run
I thought My God, what have we all become

Don't burst, my beating heart, or I will die
I fired and fired and wished that I could fly

Why should a little baby suffer so
I picked her up and held her body close
I cried You rotten bastards, go to hell
Exactly who I meant is hard to tell
The evil men that kept us over there
Or enemy defending their own air
Baby's life was done
I cried My God, what have we all become

Don't burst, my beating heart, or I will die
There's more out there, I wish that I could fly

My buddy held my body in his arms
Before the war our lives had been so charmed
He cried You rotten bastards, go to hell
Exactly who he meant is hard to tell
The evil men that kept us over there
Or enemy defending their own air
My life was done
He cried My God, what have we all become

They'd hit my beating heart and then I died
If only I could take him, I could fly

I could see my buddy staring at his gun
He cried My God, what have we all become