Initially, I was tempted to listen to this a few times but, in the way that producers do (I'm not one, by the way), the first listen, and in most cases not even all of it, should be the make or break on a straight-up pop song. Mentioning The Beatles, I think we all recall that most of their big singles had you hooked in the first 30 seconds.

This didn't grab me, I'm afraid. I found that the chord progesssion, while interesting, was awkward in too many places. You know, the story (not literally) doesn't flow off the page, so to speak. No timing issues, a tad fill-heavy maybe but not obtrusively. Plainly put, the vocals need work. The mix was decent enough in general, good enough for most intents and purposes.

Thanks for putting it up, and I will have a listen to your other songs.