I don't know how anyone could make a statement like this about a tune they've never heard. How could you know if the timing was off or not? Maybe you'd prefer a different phrasing, but for me Larry is the only one who knows how the timing goes right now being that it's a new tune.

I found the timing fine. It would fit with a Beatles type song.

I liked the guitar and organ solo idea.

I like your other Beatle type tune a lot better. IMHO