A good melody and lyrics indeed.

I do have some dirty peaks as well...
but not so important..

My personal opinion..( I know.. )
I would after the first chapter in the song boost the song with a drum and base...
to give it more body.

Fred
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Keyboards/Sound Units: Kurzweil 2600S, Roland VR-760, Acces Virus C, Roland G-800, Akai AX60, Minimoog, Machine Drum, Roland R8-M, mediastation x-76