WARNING: The song's hook is based on a popular colorful phrase involving a 4-letter word. Nothing terrible, just a bit on the edge.

This is a rather radical concept for a song, so, I need to know does this song (the story) work for you? I can't see this as something on the radio but it could be an album cut for me. That is, if it has any merit, and I really don't know, that's why I post it. Scratching my head on this one. For all I know, it could be a smash hit or throw it in the dumpster.

Nothing more than a rough, scratch demo here. Acoustic guitar / vocal, recorded on one track.
http://www.ttmbandroom.com/index.php?t=audio_player&song_id=1150

EDIT: I forgot to put OT in the subject, sorry.

[This message has been edited by SemiLiveMusic (edited 10-21-2010).]

Nice job Bill....good luck with this song I enjoyed it.

Bill,
Thoroughly enjoyed This one Bill,Nice guitar, good lyrics,It could be funny or sad dependent on the listener intrpretation of the story line.

The vocals were dead right for this song and certainly not one for the trash can.

Would love to hear a completed version of this song with all the refinements.

Just my opinion as a novice critic.

Gilbert.

Bill,

I'm really looking forward to the finished product. I believe you're on the right track with this one, just needs some more variation in the bridge/chorus. And, it's definitely a keeper.

Thanks,

Gary