Here's a silly traditional country style song I did on the Audya. Too much reverb on vocal but it's decent.

Let me know if you like this song. Or hate it. Really, I do need to know if people like it. As a songwriter, I simply HAVE to get honest feedback.

Song was written about my neighbor, Billy, who did survive and is none the worse for wear but it was very dangerous surgery. I entitled this thread "Joe Lee's Got An Aneurism" because our musician friend, Joe Lee Richards, who plays mean guitar and also has a Ketron Midjay, also had an aneurism. He lived, too, haha, so, maybe I should record a version for him. He'd hopefully get a kick out of it.

I would like to know if you find this humorous. A professional critic told me it's only mildly humorous and heck, I think it's rather funny. But, I'm jaded, as I wrote it. Again, I need honest feedback.
http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8648166

EDIT: This is a 128kbps mp3... the original wav was not this bad, vocally.

BILLY'S GOT AN ANEURISM
(copr)2007 Bill Pittman

Billy's got an aneurism, it's internal terrorism
Let's hope he's had baptism, everybody pray
Wife and daughter scared to death, sorry, Billy, I said death
You just breathe a lot of breaths, it's gon' be okay

[CHORUS:]
Pray, brother, pray
Pray, sister, pray
We'll keep that Reaper at bay
Pray, pray, pray

Ain't no need for pessimism, they gon' get the aneurism
You should think futurism, come on Billy, try
But word is there's a little catch if you let this make you a wreck
Limber up and start to stretch and kiss your butt Goodbye

[ CHORUS - REPEAT ]

Yeah, life is full of ups and downs, sorry, Billy, I said down
Come on, man, wipe that frown, negative won't do
Listen Billy, this is key, if you wake up, try to pee
If bed is wet, glory be, you have made it through

[ CHORUS - REPEAT ]
You'll see another day
Pray, pray, pray

[This message has been edited by SemiLiveMusic (edited 01-20-2010).]

I like it, but I have a perverted sense of humor, as you know.
Vocals a little hot, seem to be trying to distort.
DonM

What do you think non-perverted people will think? Do you think they would find it humorous?

How would I know? Ask Ian, no Diki, no Chas, no Russ, no . . . there may not be any normal people here.

DonM

Bill I have to give you credit for being able to spell the title correctly..

I found it in extremely poor taste, disgusting in its' sentiment, and found it to be offensive in every form...

So, consequently, I LOVED it!

No, haha, apparently, you can't spell any better than I can. It should have a "y" at the end, not an "i."

aneurysm

Rats!

Oh, you mean I spelled "Audya" correctly? Okay.

[This message has been edited by SemiLiveMusic (edited 01-20-2010).]

Great song and performance Bill. I really enjoyed that and could identify having had a ruptured brain aneurysm myself back in 2000 .... and am only just a little crazy now because of it

Nigel,

I got told off on SZ for using the Lords Name in vein, in the UK we do it a lot, it’s not intended to offend. My wife cousin had a brain aneurysm just after Christmas, I don’t think he would appreciate me singing that song to him, from the state of him I am not certain he would remember me singing it to in one minute after did since is short term memory has gone with the work they did on his brain or the aneurysm. You are lucky Nigel there is one or two things I would like to forget about right now, but I won’t highjack this thread, Doh did I do it covertly. Nigel I hope you keep well, eat the right food, BP under control and don’t smoke.

Doctor Hughes

My wife said dear oh dear and laughed.

Just a song for a nursing home.

After you release it can I sing it.

Just one observation the second last line of the second verse does not rhyme

Would"But word is there's a little catch if you find you cannot scatch".

Hope you don't mind the sugestion.

Cousin Ken