Originally posted by Dnj:Bill.....nice job so far ...I enjoyed the lyrics and flow of the song tells a nice story too........But I honestly felt that there needed to be a "bridge" with some different chords in the middle somwhere to break up the flow as it tends to get musicly repetitive .....
thanx for sharing your work....
hope to hear the finished product sometime also.
Yeah, I use a bridge often. I didn't think it needed one but that's why I posted. I'll think about that again.
The song as written has symmetry -- first half is the grandson/son/grandpa and second half is granddaughter/daughter/grandma. So, I kinda did that on purpose. A bridge could bring it all together but that's what I did with that outro part where the grandpa sums it up. I'll have to play it a zillion times to get a better feel.
I actually had this written and finished for over a year with a totally different melody and chords. Nothing at all like this but I got to fooling around on guitar and this chord progression sounded "right." So, I re-worked the music.
It's funny how songs strike people differently. When I first wrote this, I thought "Man, this is a masterpiece." I played it for some people. Some loved it, yep. But a writer who I thought would flip out didn't. Very much surprised me. I wrote it, so what do I know, but I personally feel that this is a really good lyric that is oh, so true. Hopefully, this melody will showcase the song even better. 'Cause I really like this song. It's like a cycle of life in a song.