I enjoyed the slapstick saloon ragtimesque of it's genre. Length is correct. Some redundancy of the progression. Aside all this I give an A+ BECAUSE the message you convey (in it's humor) is 100% delivered. That's what we are trying to achieve is it not? A message delivered. Keep it up and before you know it, you will be opening for Jimmy Buffet. There is a market for your material in the deep south.
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