Originally posted by Caragabal:
...Just one observation the second last line of the second verse does not rhyme
Would"But word is there's a little catch if you find you cannot scatch".
Hope you don't mind the sugestion.
Hello, Ken. It's a near rhyme. In Broadway type tunes, they are quite strict, opting for perfect rhymes. In country music, especially, near rhymes are not only okay but actually encouraged.
The main thing for me about this particular phrase is that it is a very key line in the entire song. I don't want someone saying it is making fun of a dire situation. The song is intended to bring humor. The intent is to observe... don't let worry paralyze you because all it will do is make it worse... smile, pray, it's gonna be okay.
Also, it is not meant to be strictly about an aneurysm. My hope was that someone facing any serious health issue could get a smile out of it. Because humor is healthy. In fact, when I first was toying with the arrangement, I was very close to settling on a very up-tempo gospel type arrangement. Which I might still go to. A hand-clapping gospel thing. I could envision nurses in a hospital station playing this song and having a good time with it, even playing it for patients. That's the hope.
Now, reason I post is because I truly want to know how this affects people. If it offends a lot of people, I will have to consider trashing it.
Thanks Ken, I will play around with it a bit. A more perfect rhyme might be better.
[This message has been edited by SemiLiveMusic (edited 01-21-2010).]