John this project has potential in these early stages, I would say vocal effects need to be addressed, also are you using a "popping" screen on your Mic?......good luck on your next efforts moving ahead.
Hope to hear the final product when done. This demo might help..

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tEZNd8VAYxk

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E_sBi_ciNhk&list=RD25tEZNd8VAYxk