I'm scheduled to perform at a funeral this coming Saturday. I was asked to perform: 'Red Sails in the Sunset', but to change the words a little to make it more appropiate to the occasion.

The original lyrics:

Red sails in the sunset
Way out on the sea
Plese carry my loved one
Home safely for me

He sailed at the dawning
All day I've been blue
Red sails in the sunset
I'm trusting in you

Swift wings you must borrow
Make straight for the shore
We marry tomorrow
And he goes sailing no more

Red sails in the sunset
Way out on the sea
Oh carry my loved one
Home safely to me


My proposed altered lyrics for the funeral:

Red sails in the sunset
Way out on the sea
Plese carry our loved one
Home safely for me

He sailed at the dawning
All day we've been blue
Red sails in the sunset
We're trusting in you

Swift wings you must borrow
Make straight for the shore
In heaven tomorrow
Then he'll be sailing no more

Red sails in the sunset
Way out on the sea
Please carry our loved one
Home safely to sea

Interested in hearing what you guys think of these altered lyrics. Feedback & suggestions appreciated.

Thanks. - Scott